雅思高文文范文-进口食品与当地食品

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来历：知乎
Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
翻译 ：现现在，人们餐桌上的食品很多都是从千里之外的农场运输而来。一些人以为，人们只食用当地农民生产的食粮农作物，会对情况和经济发生更有益的影响。
你以为这件事能否利大于弊
话题：社会类
范例： 利弊分析


剖析：雅思写作考题中有题干偏长的，有偏短的，这道题目就属于题干偏长。对于题干偏短的题目，难点通常为在题干中的句子逻辑大概是辞汇了解。而对于这类题干偏长的题目，难点就在于不要漏点（cover all the points that are presented in the prompt）。题干中常常含有多个关键词，大师一定要留意把题干中一切关键词都找到，在誊写的进程中要把一切关键词都斟酌在内。

我们来齐截下这个题目中的关键词：
Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers.
我们看上面 标红的这些关键词，
本题是对照：人们采办利用需要远程运输的食品和当地食品之间的不同， 在探讨益处弊真个时辰，一定要涵盖到对于情况和经济的利弊。
假如只会商了远程运输的食品和当地食品的利弊，可是遗漏了情况大概经济，你能够会被认定成You have not covered all the parts of the question.在使命回应部分被扣掉分数。



审清题目我们再来一路看一看可以誊写的一些概念：
The New York Times 曾有一篇叫做 ‘Environmental Cost of Shipping Groceries Around the World’ 的报道
我很喜好报道中的一段笔墨，很好的描画了全球化之下人们餐桌上的食品状态：

Cod caught off Norway is shipped to Vietnam to be turned into filets, then shipped back to Norway for sale. Argentine lemons fill supermarket shelves on the Citrus Coast of Spain, as local lemons rot on the ground. Half of Europe’s peas are grown and packaged in Kenya.
（从挪威捕捉的鳕鱼被运到越南加工成鱼片，然后运回挪威出售。阿根廷生产的柠檬填满了西班牙海岸的超市货架，而当地柠檬在空中上腐臭。欧洲一半的豌豆是在肯尼亚种植和包装的。- 此段中，挪威鳕鱼，阿根廷柠檬，肯尼亚豌豆大师都可以用作自己文章中做举例）
全球食品的自在快速运输，丰富了人们的餐桌挑选，进步了人们的生活品格，但这简直是建立在很大的价格之上，其中一个就是净化题目（pollution）。
远程大量运输会花费大量的燃料This long-distance, large-scale transportation of food consumes large quantities of fossil fuels.燃料熄灭势必会发生有害气体，特别是二氧化碳（especially carbon dioxide, the main global warming gas from transporting the food.）
一般空运发生的净化会比海运严重，但空运高效快速，很多食品运输需要保证新颖城市采用空运，更不用提货物到港后还要停止门路运输，轨道运输等等。而这些净化也会对人体发生严重影响。
Air pollutions is considered to be the most dangerous environmental threat caused by transportation. Highway vehicles, marine engines, trains and planes are the main causes of pollution which affects air quality causing damage to human health. All these toxic air pollutant are closely related with the cause of cancer, cardiovascular, respiratory and neurological diseases（这几种疾病里大师最少练会cancer和respiratory diseases的拼法，应对我们写作考试储备几种常见疾病的写法还是很有需要的，用于很多文章中的论证。别的 respiratory diseases- 呼吸系统疾病是很多雅思阅读文章中出现的辞汇，记着帮助了解阅读）。


那末情况题目好了解，而采购当地食品，又会对当地经济发生什么样的影响呢？
首先，你的钱不是交给了跨国/跨地域的供给商，而是给了当地的农户，店东等，支持了当地的中小型企业主，让资金在当地运转起来。
（It Keeps Money in Your Community:  Instead of supporting large supermarket chains, you can support individuals in your own community and help them prosper.）
当地的农民常常不像一些大型的全国大概跨国连锁，具有强大的交通网或分销渠道，采办当地食品即是帮助很多中小型农场保存。
（Because local farmers don’t have the same transportation and distribution costs as large agricultural businesses, they can retain more of the profits from their sales. This helps small farming businesses become more successful as more people purchase from them.）
固然不能不提的是，很多时辰食品出口也是很多农场保存的方式，假如冲击食品出口或食品运输对于他们影响也是不小。



好啦，分析了这么多我们看看范文



范文分析：

These days food often travels many miles as farmers export their food around the world to satisfy consumer demand. Although some people think stopping this practice（代指前句，出口食品） would benefit the economy and the environment, I believe that the negative impacts would not justify such a change.（此句可套用，Although some people think this practice would be harmful, I believe that the negative impacts would not justify …）
(开首段：两句话-布景先容+给出概念，给出概念仍然利用妥协状语从句)
The benefits of stopping the export of food are twofold（描述词-两重的）. In relation to the environment,transporting food involves the use of thousands of lorries and many flights, which contributes to pollution given all the emissions this must produce everyday.（句子写的真好，动词involve/contribute to 用的好，非限制从及given用的也好。Given = if you consider 假如斟酌到，given that 鉴于、斟酌到，假如……） This negatively affects people’s health and also may be leading to global warming. In addition to this, stopping the practice will mean that people then only buy local food, leading to a boost to local economies as farmers will become profitable（描述词-赢利的，盈利的） as they sell more.
（不再进口食品的益处- 情况方面+经济方面）
However, there are downsides to this. A problem is that these days many countries, particularly developing countries, rely on exports of their produce. Countries often have acres（英亩-权衡地盘面积的单元） and acres of plantations and crops that are only sold to foreign markets, and this provides an income to the farmers but it also provides work for thousands of local people around the world working on farms. Furthermore, people these days have become dependent on ingredients from other countries and without it people could no longer cook or eat many of their favourite recipes and many restaurants that depend on food exports may go out of business.
（国际间食品收支口的益处- 对当地农民，农场员工及群众生活）
On balance, I therefore believe that the advantages do not outweigh the disadvantages. Despite the fact that it may improve the environment, the negative economic impacts on farmers who export and their employees and the further impacts on food choices and restaurants would be too detrimental.
（结尾总结：第二句话总结了上面弊端段说起的三个点- 开首的妥协状从利用Although，结尾的妥协状从利用Despite ）
Source: From: https://www.ieltsbuddy.com
这篇文章周全回应了题目标要求：
写出了远程运输食品及外乡采办食品的益处及弊端，且益处及弊端围绕着情况题目与经济影响来探讨。
情况及经济两个点在主体1段很清楚，在主体2段中，农民出口，失业率及餐厅开张也属于经济成长范围，由于情况影响不大而没有探讨情况。
文章中也利用了sufficient and accurate的辞汇及some good phrases

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原文地址：https://zhuanlan.zhihu.com/p/595713067
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