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2021年6月高考新全国I卷作文下水文+范文(操纵文+读后续写)

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发表于 2023-4-4 07:14:22 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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你校英文报Youth正在庆贺创刊十周年。请你写一篇短文投稿,内容包括:

  • 读报的履历;
  • 爱好的栏目;
  • 期望和祝愿。
留意:

  • 写作词数应为80左右;
  • 请按以下格式在答题卡的响应位置作答。

写作思绪:

  • 既然是短文投稿,而且是庆贺创刊十周年,我感觉在第一段可以开宗明义的写Youth在这十年的兴旺成长而不需要很僵硬地写对Youth 十周年的庆祝,这样会与这个主题加倍贴切。
  • 第二个就是读报的履历,既然是校报,自己可以当做高三的门生,可以说三年前看到的这个报纸,看到是就深深地爱上了这个报纸,而且可以写这份报纸的首要内容是什么,
  • 关于爱好的栏目,言之有理即可,可以写一写为什么它是你最喜好的栏目(比如它对你的帮助)。
  • 最初面就是结尾,也就是对英语报的期望和祝愿。

下水文:
Youth and Me
The past decade has witnessed the vigorous advancement of the English newspaper Youth.
The first time I came across the newspaper three years ago, I was deeply immersed in the content which mainly focuses on the daily routine of youngsters. (读报履历)The column Stress Relief was my favorite part, since it not only provides me with various methods to deal with current study pressure but offers me plenty of materials, which can be applied to the writing assignments. (喜好栏目及来由)
I do expect more impressive articles and wish Youth a prosperous future.(期望和祝愿)
第二节 (满分25分)
阅读下面材料,按照其内容和所给段落开首语续写两段,使之组成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.

留意:1.续写词数应为150左右
2.请按以下格式在答题卡的响应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.____________________________
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.________________________________
范文:
Paragraph1:As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. One look and he knew what they were up to. Seeing their crestfallen faces, he told them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother. The twins cheered up and did as told. Within an hour, the kitchen was cleaned, and Father had made some egg sandwiches and cooked some oat porridge. Then he sneaked back to bed. The twins prepared the breakfast tray, adding a card they had made, and then carried the tray upstairs to their parents’bedroom.
Paragraph2:The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. They yelled, “Happy Mother’s Day, darling Mummy!” Mother hugged the twins. Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast tray.She shook Father who was pretending to snore. He feigned astonishment when he saw the breakfast. Mother bit into a sandwich and said it was the best she had ever tasted. Jeff immediately wanted to have a bite. Jenna caught her father’s eye and they winked at each other secretly.

思绪分析:
续写第一段:
从第二段第一句话The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.可以得知,双胞胎必定预备好了早饭才会送到楼上给妈妈,那末他们是若何预备的呢?从续写第一段第一句话As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. 不难想出,必定是父亲帮了忙。
续写第一段可以写成:1.孩子们见到父亲以后的反应+2.父亲的询问+3.父亲抚慰和帮手+4.父亲回到自己的房间
按照第二段第一句The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.可得知,孩子们叫醒母亲以后是给母亲吃早饭,那末既然孩子们发出了行动,母亲就需要有反应(比如感动的描写),母亲的反应以后就是孩子们和父亲的反应,最初就是扫尾,也就是大旨的升华。
续写第二段可以写成:1.孩子们对母亲的祝愿+2.母亲的感动反应+3.孩子和父亲之间静静的互动+大旨的深化

下水文:As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. They pretended to be poised, trying to block the messy scene from his father’s sight. However, the odor of burning betrayed them. Questioned by his father, Jeff narrated the whole story, twiddling with his fingers nervously. “ Oh, man. You guys are so sweet. Now let’s get mom a surprise!” their father said in a soothing manner, his previous anger giving place to ecstasy. Without hesitation, their father guided them to prepare for the festive feast. Not long after that, an inviting cuisine was ready. Then their father retired into the bedroom.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. “Happy Mother’s Day!” the twins exclaimed together. Their mother got out of the bed, hardly able to believe the gift before her. She felt a warm upsurge in her heart, tears streaming down her cheeks. Stretching out her arms, she lapped them in her arms. “Thank you, sweethearts. It is best meal I’ve ever had,” she said after savoring the sandwich. At that moment, extremely proud and overjoyed, Jeff and Jenna stealthily winked at their father standing beside them. Not only is the meal a surprise but a secret bonding the father with his twins.

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续写写得很好,特别是第一段,我感觉范文就给的过分僵硬了,父亲一眼看破真的很迷,可是很多句子过于高级了,而且剧情虽然很好玩,可是200个词严重超标了,只能说是一篇很好的续写,但不是一篇很好的高考续写,不外还是很有参考意义的
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