来自托福120满分大佬的托福写作范文

今夕何夕535

来历：知乎
这是我邻人，一个初高中在我们市本国语黉舍就读、大学去美国读、现在UCSD大二的小妹妹，在美国考的，由于她要转学，所以又得考托福
真真是吓死宝宝了这分，五体投体 ●|￣|＿
我问她怎样预备的，这个拉冤仇的有点欠美意义的说她一向浪到考前三天，忽然严重得不可，做了三套托福题，阅读听力全对，所以自我感受稳了，就上科场了，然后就……120了
大要这就是大佬吧，她的话我还是信的，由于她真的英语本质很好而且也确切不喜好刷题
她的才能是那种随随意便就110+的，可是要到达120，确切是天时人地相宜一样不能少
考完她说幸亏她没随手把她的练笔删了，急救了一份给我，这里分享给大师
写作思绪行文结构请与我的另一篇备考经历帖配合食用：

（还在草稿箱里没写完，先点赞收藏期待一下吧……）

<hr/>综合写作

TPO 54
In the reading, the writer talks about three possible methods to decrease the salinity level of the Salton Sea. The lecturer in the listening, however, believes that none of the three methods is realistic or practical, and uses specific reasons and details to support his claim.
First, the reading passage states that one way to decrease the level of salinity is to remove salt from the lake using facilities. In the listening, however, the professor argues that this method may lead to serious health risks. After water evaporates, it left behind salt and other potentially toxic chemicals. If those harmful chemicals are spread into the air and breathed into people's bodies, then it will be extremely dangerous. Thus, the idea isn't applicable.
Furthermore, the writer points out that to reduce salinity level, people can dilute the lake with ocean water which is less salty comparing to the lake water. On the contrary, the lecturer disagrees with this idea by suggesting that the cost is too high to be affordable for the local government. In order to dilute the lake, he argues, the construction of pipe lines and canals are necessary to transport ocean water, which lies one hundred kilometers away, into the lake. As a result of this high construction cost, this method proves untenable.
Lastly, the reading passage mentions that walls may be built to separate the lake into multiple parts, and salinity will be reduced only in the largest section. Yet the lecturer finds this method indefensible because those walls won't work for long. The regions where the salinity level is the highest often experience frequent geological activities such as earthquakes, which will destroy the walls. If the walls are broken, water with high salinity level can easily mix back into the low salinity sections. Therefore, building walls is not a potential solution.
<hr/>自力写作

As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1、Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study ( For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
2、Students must volunteer to work in the university's city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town.( For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.)
Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples.
In this day and age, it is commonly acknowledged that the four years of college are significant to a person's development. There have been ongoing debates on how students can best take advantage of their time during the long school breaks. People view it differently due to their dissimilar backgrounds and experiences. From my point of view, universities should ask students to volunteer to work in their hometowns or the city where the school is located in that they can make more friends and learn valuable skills.
To begin with, doing voluntary work provides students with an entirely different environment to make connections with people outside of the campus. In other words, while university students spend most of their time at school and in class, they seldom have the chance to go out and make friends with people in the society. By volunteering to work in the city, as a result, students will get to know people who share the same interest with them and have the passion to make their community a better place. For example, last summer I volunteered in my hometown's largest bookstore. During my three weeks working there, I made friends with students of different ages and different backgrounds. Many of them studied in another city, but they all came back to their hometown during summer and wished to make some contribution to the community. I also met people who had already entered the workplace but still actively participating in voluntary work. I was impressed by the passion and vitality I saw on all these people. Some of them even turned out to be one of my best friends.
Furthermore, being a volunteer helps students learn valuable skills that are not taught in the classroom. To be more specific, doing voluntary work requires one to be socially responsible, patient to others, and willing to make contact with strangers. Thus, during the time when students are volunteering, they gradually gain these important skills that will definitely benefit their self-development. For instance, a friend of my mother's is now a leader of a non-profit organization. When I met her last month, she gave me the impression of a very outgoing, warmhearted, and optimistic person. However, she told me that before she participated in voluntary work during her school days, she was extremely shy and introverted. Being a volunteer not only helped her understand her social responsibility but also made her into a helpful, extroverted person because of the constant interaction with other volunteers and people in need. As a result, after seeing the beauty of voluntary work, she founded her own non-profit organization, aiming to help homeless kids in the city.
In conclusion, I believe that working as a volunteer in the students' hometowns or the cities where the universities are located benefits students a lot, because they can make friends with people outside of the campus and learn valuable skills that are not in the textbooks.
<hr/>总结

我看完以后很大的一点感受就是行文很是自然流利，读起来很舒服，逻辑链很完整，用词不会过于高峻上却也有那末几个很出挑的地方。
希望大师读完也有自己的感悟，然后考分up!up!up!



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形腿望舞

感激分享，真的就是很流利的感受，用词也不复杂

却写杂布计

进修了，感激分享！